PPC Posting Board - Interlude - Xericka and Gremlin

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Finally! Here it is, the interlude that ended up taking on a life of its own. After their last mission leaves a wound on Gremlin's pride, she goes off on a tirade - much to Xericka's chagrin. Does hilarity ensue? You'll have to read and find out.

Minor warning: the interlude contains bad language and suggestive scenes between two women. It's SFW, but if you don't care for any sort of slash - even if it's non-explicit - you might not enjoy this too much.

http://vgdivision.dreamwidth.org/5595.html

As always, constructive criticism would be welcomed.

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Fun! — Neshomeh, Fri May 4 11:49am

This is a very entertaining read. The interplay between the two agents lends a lot of energy to it, especially because the contrast between their reactions is so stark. It's clear that Xericka goes... more
- Well... — Ellipsis Flood, Sat May 5 7:17am
  
  One possible German translation for being screwed can be literally translated as being 'in the/an ass.' So it makes a weird kind of roundabout sense there.
Re: Interlude — doctorlit, Fri May 4 10:07am

Once again, excellent work with Xericka's lack-of-emotions. I like that she's still able to show concern for her partner, and move out of her comfort zone in order to make Gremlin feel better, while... more
Great job! — Sergio Turbo, Thu May 3 1:20pm

It was a really good insight on your Agent pair. Xericka's emotionless behaviour was used very well, I think. It was really funny... and as I already said previously, I think that that girl is... more
Re: Interlude - Xericka and Gremlin — firemagic, Wed May 2 7:45pm

Oh, this was interesting to read. The agents came off like real people (well, as much as they should, anyways) and nothing felt forced. One thing: I looked over 'The one with Zuko's baby' and it... more
- Glad to hear it! — PoorCynic, Thu May 3 11:34am
  
  Making characters seem like real people is one of the key things I try to do in my writing. As for your question: this does not take place immediately after "The One With Zuko's Baby." I tried to... more
- - Re: Glad to hear it! — firemagic, Thu May 3 9:17pm
    
    I see. I did suspect that it was after another mission, but I wanted to make sure.
Re: Interlude - Xericka and Gremlin — Astral Void, Wed May 2 6:28pm

This is awesome. I always love your stuff, you write so well. Poor Gremlin, though- losing hair always does suck. (If you want, she can borrow Agent Grace's hair-changing machine- she may end up with ... more
- Thanks! — PoorCynic, Thu May 3 11:36am
  
  Gremlin will probably stick with having short hair for now, if only to allow for any possible future head-rubs.
Concrit — Phobos, Wed May 2 12:59pm

This was a very enjoyable read. Well done. The personalities of your agents really came through, here. I liked getting to know them in a situation that was not normal for them. I loved the line about ... more
- Thank you! — PoorCynic, Thu May 3 11:38am
  
  High praise indeed. I'm very glad you liked it! I owe JulyFlame a lot for helping me with the suggestive scenes. I had never written anything in that vein before, and she was kind enough to give me a ... more
Thank you. — ShatteredSanity, Wed May 2 11:29am

First things first: This was really good. I enjoyed reading this, and I can't think of anything I disliked about it. Second: Thank you. Thank you so so SO much for you're portrayal of Nobodies.... more
- You're too kind. — PoorCynic, Thu May 3 11:42am
  
  I'm glad I was able to put your concerns at ease. The emotionality of badfic Nobodies has always been a sticking point for me in the past, and I wanted to ensure that I didn't repeat the old cliches... more

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