The personalities of your agents really came through, here. I liked getting to know them in a situation that was not normal for them.
I loved the line about Makes-Things.
I'm not familiar with Nobodies, but I don't think I suffer due to that lack of familiarity. I got a very good idea of what Xericka is all about.
Her voice had slowed down a bit, as if she were examining each word twice over in her mind before sending them down to her tongue. Great description here. I could picture exactly what that was like.
As for the suggestive scenes... Very well executed. You have a good handle on how to write an intimately sensual scene to great effect, without it getting into overtly sexual territory. Five stars.
Overall, the pacing was excellent, the characters were well written, and the situation was relateable. An excellent piece of fiction.
Finally! Here it is, the interlude that ended up taking on a life of its own. After their last mission leaves a wound on Gremlin's pride, she goes off on a tirade - much to Xericka's chagrin. Does... more
This is a very entertaining read. The interplay between the two agents lends a lot of energy to it, especially because the contrast between their reactions is so stark. It's clear that Xericka goes... more
One possible German translation for being screwed can be literally translated as being 'in the/an ass.' So it makes a weird kind of roundabout sense there.
Once again, excellent work with Xericka's lack-of-emotions. I like that she's still able to show concern for her partner, and move out of her comfort zone in order to make Gremlin feel better, while... more
It was a really good insight on your Agent pair. Xericka's emotionless behaviour was used very well, I think. It was really funny... and as I already said previously, I think that that girl is... more
Oh, this was interesting to read. The agents came off like real people (well, as much as they should, anyways) and nothing felt forced. One thing: I looked over 'The one with Zuko's baby' and it... more
Making characters seem like real people is one of the key things I try to do in my writing. As for your question: this does not take place immediately after "The One With Zuko's Baby." I tried to... more
This is awesome. I always love your stuff, you write so well. Poor Gremlin, though- losing hair always does suck. (If you want, she can borrow Agent Grace's hair-changing machine- she may end up with ... more
High praise indeed. I'm very glad you liked it! I owe JulyFlame a lot for helping me with the suggestive scenes. I had never written anything in that vein before, and she was kind enough to give me a ... more
First things first: This was really good. I enjoyed reading this, and I can't think of anything I disliked about it. Second: Thank you. Thank you so so SO much for you're portrayal of Nobodies.... more
I'm glad I was able to put your concerns at ease. The emotionality of badfic Nobodies has always been a sticking point for me in the past, and I wanted to ensure that I didn't repeat the old cliches... more