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Huinesoron
Huh. Well, that's going to change...
Tue Apr 4, 2017 5:14am
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Spoiler block
Spoiler block
Does whatever a spoiler block does
Blocks out spoilers
Like a boss
Probably related to
The Writer's Block
Look out!
Here comes the spoiler block!


(Is that enough spoiler block? I think it is.)

... absolutely nothing.

XD

You really had me going there. I was actually quite shocked when Dawn didn't manage to find a way out of the situation. Which I think is an advantage of AU stories - they get rid of the 'ho-hum, all the main characters are going to survive' effect.

Am I allowed to do concrit for an April Fool's mission? I think I must be, right?

Well, first off... you didn't post it on April 1st! That's a little bit cheeky. >:( But I forgive you.

Secondly... well, huh, my secondly and thirdly turn out to be 'I didn't pay attention while reading', so we'll chuck those out.

Fourthly, then, Annelise doesn't actually come across as that bad until the 'oh, her dad won't mind' part. I mean, I get that she's apparently warped the characters out of shape, but in and of herself she just feels like an ordinary person. Which may be the point? I'm not sure (and then she does flip sociopath, as you point out).

Fifthly... I was going to say that 'mission through the Suvian's eyes' isn't something that would work with an actual badfic, but I don't think that's even true. It wouldn't work with a first person badfic - though even then you could use a secondary character for your viewpoint - but something you can Sue's-eye-view up... is actually a very interesting concept. Are you planning to do any more with it?

hS

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    • Huh. Well, that's going to change... — Huinesoron, Tue Apr 4 5:14am
      • Some belated replying!Zingenmir, Sun Apr 16 12:02am
        My dear hS, your spoiler block is most amusing. I shall try one of my own, since I suspect it might be a good idea. Gil-galad was a spoiler block of him the spoilers sadly block the last whose block... more
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