Sun Sep 2, 2018 10:55pm

I'm jumping into this arc with no knowledge of what's happened previously or down the road, but it seems like this is a pretty good place to do it. I don't feel like I'm missing anything, and I'm immediately drawn in and invested in the Reader's success. I wish her all the best with her gift! It's a sweet idea. ^_^

Love this line of Kozar's: “Ah,” said the Klingon. “It's a courtship ritual. You are finally going to attempt less pathetic flirtation with Naya.” And his Klingon-ness in general. Excellent foil to the Reader's twitterpatedness.

I did find one thing the three of you missed: lacking Kozar to muse briefly should be leaving Kozar to muse briefly. Easy thing for the eyes to glaze over since the words are the same length and share a bunch of letters.


  • New Interlude! (DIC)Zingenmir, Sat Sep 1 10:55pm
    Behold! A finished thing! It's even been betaed and read through and everything! *HG promptly finds something the three of us missed* Anyway, behold! A new interlude, starring the Reader and Kozar.... more
    • Well, not very promptly. Hieronymus Graubart, Mon Oct 1 12:19pm
      But since you called for it, the paragraph starting with Ten hours later appears to contain too few "had". Since most of the following had happened (in past perfect) before the events that are... more
    • An enjoyable read.Snowy the Sane Fangirl, Wed Sep 5 3:12am
      I like character-driven pieces. A small, personal conflict that is driven almost entirely by someone being nervous or uncomfortable. The fate of the universe doesn't hang in the balance but a skilled ... more
    • Re: interludedoctorlit, Tue Sep 4 9:55am
      I do love how the variety of characters in HQ can lead to such simple character-driven events that are nonetheless compelling for being mostly dialogue. This interlude was a good example of that. I... more
    • That was niceTomash, Mon Sep 3 5:22pm
      I hope Naya ends up liking the Reader's gift. The interaction between the Reader and Kozar were nice. I'm not sure if Kozar using "logical" a lot is T'Zar rubbing off on him or not. If it is, that's... more
    • More C&C love for the interludes.Hardric, Mon Sep 3 3:18pm
      And relational fluff, I guess. Will see for flames later. Grilled corn looks interesting. The Reader sighed and, in time honored alien tradition, switched screens to read the Librarian's latest... more
      • Re: Combat SkillsSgt. Maj. [Ret] Emiranlanoamar of Gallifrey, Tue Sep 4 12:59pm
        Oh, please. Kozar is being far too strict here: by my estimates Xandria was performing as well as a standard Gallifreyan conscript a year ago. If we had more time I could polish her up to standard... more
        • Hello there, sir.Hardric, Thu Sep 6 11:21am
          It feels really nice speaking to you again. Hopes life has been treating you well so far and in the future. Speaking of plans, I stumbled on some fantasy webseries where narrative laws are pretty... more
          • Son.Sgt. Maj. [Ret] Emiranlanoamar of Gallifrey, Thu Sep 6 5:48pm
            I am a veteran of the Last Great Time War, a conflict that spanned dimensions and the very essence of time itself. I watched timelines been born, age, wither, and die in the blink of an eye, orders... more
    • Favourite reference:Huinesoron, Mon Sep 3 5:37am
      Julius Caesar of Gallifrey ! That was fun. ^_^ I still have the file of all my excerpts from the dress rehearsal somewhere. (By which I mean 'the comments I made on the Board'; I wasn't actually... more
    • D'aww. — Neshomeh, Sun Sep 2 10:55pm
    • Aww!S.M.F., Sun Sep 2 10:35am
      I empathize with the Reader's problem strongly; it can be reeeaally hard to get the words just right. |D And Dawn/Kozar makes a very good point about imperfections. And boy, does that last mission... more
    • Eep!Iximaz, Sat Sep 1 11:02pm
      Okay, first of all: Povs are still freaking adorable. I loved the callback to Rectangular Gallifreyan, that made me guffaw out loud. The Reader is adorable and I love how desperately she wants to... more
      • A pov is a pov is a pov...Zingenmir, Sat Sep 1 11:04pm
        ...and a pov is cute. I am never letting go of Rectangular Gallifreyan. Neither is the Reader. Especially in her next body. No, Emiran is going to be ribbed about that for the rest of his days. Glad... more
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