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Even if I end up making things worse?
Thu Jun 15, 2017 17:54

Joe was curious about what the ‘other stuff’ Raine had made up was – she was rather quiet, and so he wondered sometimes what was going on in her head – but didn’t ask. If she’d wanted to say, he assumed she would have, or else would have dropped a broader hint about wanting someone to ask her to elaborate, and so asking might be seen as prying. If she asked him many questions about his, he’d take that as an invitation to discuss content more thoroughly.

After he asked about his general ideas for a plot, Raine fell silent and began chewing on her sleeve. Based on these behaviors, he hypothesized that the other Teppenpaw either was thinking very deeply about what he’d said or else thought it was a bad idea from the top and was thinking very deeply about how to phrase her objections. Instead, though, her comments turned out to be something in the middle of those two extremes, which he thought was, overall, probably for the best.

“Probably not,” he said, looking at his paper again and noting how long it had taken him to scribble an introduction he still wasn’t entirely happy with. Mom had drilled him thoroughly enough on what the skeleton of a story looked like that he could write something acceptable, but he had never really liked creative writing very much because he could never do it well enough to satisfy himself. “Especially since I don’t even know how to frame anyone for anything, and I think I’m probably a lot more…organized…than a spirit of chaos,” he grinned, willing to laugh at himself a little. “Huh. What am I going to do with this…Professor Nash said some people think they can feel pain for a minute, right?” he asked. “Some students work together to hex the poltergeist until it leaves. That’s a resolution to the conflict in the story, right?”

Of course, the story so far was Jim hiding under a table. An intermediate dude hiding under a table was not likely to be super-effective at resolving the conflict in the story. This was probably going to require supporting characters, which meant…”And if I do that, I can stuff the dialogue with…stuff to move it along fast,” he added. Characters telling stuff would be quicker than one character thinking and then doing. It wouldn’t be good literature, of course – one was supposed to show, not tell, Mom insisted on that too even though she was the woman who considered books full of nothing but dead people talking and thinking about philosophy to be good literature and had on occasion mentioned having a degree of affection for both Tolstoy and Tolkien – but if Professor Nash really expected the intermediates to produce deathless prose on the fly in class about poltergeists, he was presumably either drunk or had never been around non-adults before, probably even including the time in the Dark Ages when he himself had presumably been a non-adult.

  • It's the thought that countsRaine, Thu Jun 15 08:59
    “Yours sounds really good,” Raine smiled, as Joe explained his story, praise that was backed up by the amused little smile that had appeared on her face as he described the scene. “I-I used the gum... more
    • Even if I end up making things worse? — Joe, Thu Jun 15 17:54
      • I generally trust your intentionsRaine , Wed Jul 5 08:43
        Raine was pretty sure that most of what Joe said was thinking out loud rather than actually seeking input or opinion from her. Having grown up with Kyte, who struggled to keep any of his many... more
        • Only generally?Joe, Wed Jul 5 11:02
          Raine seemed to agree that the ideas Joe had were at least not terrible, so he decided to go with them. Girls, he’d always heard, were supposed to be better at telling stories, so if she thought it... more
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