TEEN GIRL PANTSING / STRIPPING DISCUSSION BOARD
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CallieMay
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Fri Dec 7, 2018 11:54
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I just started my first story, Thanksgiving Mishap!! and I was just wondering if anyone had any feedback or ideas they wanted to see happen as the story progressed. I was very nervous to start, but I was wondering if you guys wanted me to continue. Thank you in advance! !!

CallieMay

    • Feedback - Executionus, Sun Dec 9 22:04
      It's a pretty good story so far with a good storyline and action, but future parts need refining. There are several typos and grammar issues. Part 2 was rushed to the point where it hurt the story,... more
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