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Colby Wallmow
9/26 Discussion
Fri Sep 26, 2014 12:43pm
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Now that I have completed my personal narrative, I am most proud about the way I was able to write about such a difficult topic that occurred during my life. I am also happy that I completed my first college essay. This was the first time I was able to write about what happened in such detail and how it affected me. It was hard for me but I was able to power through it. I am nervous that I wrote too much of the story and how I was effected during the time instead of writing about how it has effected me now, years later. I am also apprehensive that professor Bates will not like my style of writing. I am not sure that my writing is sophisticated enough for a college level course at the moment. I am also nervous that I got a little too repetitive during my essay when it came to the events that had happened. For my writing process, I drew a web with three things that happened during the event in my life I was writing about. After I found my topics, I wrote down either how that topic affected me or other events that it caused to occur. I then organized it so it was in chronological order and wrote my introduction paragraph. I tried to end my induction paragraph with an easy flow right into my first body paragraph. When I wrote my body paragraphs I would write about the three subtopics I had written down in my web. After I finish my three body paragraphs I brought it all back together with a proven thesis. After I wrote my first draft, I left it alone for two days. I then revisited it two days later to look for grammar mistakes and to make sure the essay made sense and had flow. Once I felt comfortable with my essay, I took it to a friend and had them read it over. They read it and looked for grammar mistakes. After that I fixed all of my mistakes, printed it and turned it in for my grade.

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