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Sooze
Critique
Fri Jul 15, 2016 09:32
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Ask yourself WHAT is the essence of what you are trying to convey. What do you want readers to FEEL and then paint with every color that adds to that.

Be clear about your intent for writing this. Just recording a history of events is one thing, helping others understand HOW you FELT is something else entirely.

I refuse to be harsh and critical of something that is personal to you.

    • Write for yourselfhappystuff, Sun Jul 31 08:00
      With something so close and personal, my suggestion is to write for yourself first. When my son died, I put a lot of things in writing. It can be an amazing release and very healing, but at the same... more
    • Critique — Sooze, Fri Jul 15 09:32
    • What do you want to hear?HRHCarla, Sun Jul 3 16:15
      Do you want a critic of the story, its organization, style? Do you want basic editing? CR
      • I'm LostTBone, Mon Jul 18 09:29
        I want Katie's story to be out there to show others that through hard work and dedication you can accomplish anything. It opens so many wounds I don't think I'll be able to do it.
        • I understand that you want to share...HRHCarla, Sun Jul 31 09:31
          I worry about opening old wounds. Trying, at this time, may be more pain than joy for you right now. However, if you feel the need to tell your story, perhaps you could share it with someone else... more
          • blogs are great tooally, Tue Aug 2 15:37
            This is a new era we live in. It used to be books...now it is "blogs" and people share their most intimate daily thoughts sometimes on line...why do they write their blogs? To help ease the pain in... more
            • You and your family are in my prayersPaula, Wed Aug 31 19:01
              I have been 'lucky' in that with the small family it is now just my Mom and I. She is 85, so I know in the next few years I will lose her as well. I can only offer my prayers and thoughts to you as... more
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